Student Exemplars - Beautiful Writing from English 11 Honours
This is a digital bulletin board for exemplary work from this class! Enjoy!!
NARRATIVE 1: A Picture is Worth a Thousand Words
After a "gallery walk" through Fred Herzog's collection of Vancouver street photography (circa 1950's-60's), students selected a photograph for the basis of their short story, focusing on the characterization of the subject.
"Fish for Sale" by Alessio Pizzolato
NARRATIVE 1: A Picture is Worth a Thousand Words
After a "gallery walk" through Fred Herzog's collection of Vancouver street photography (circa 1950's-60's), students selected a photograph for the basis of their short story, focusing on the characterization of the subject.
"Fish for Sale" by Alessio Pizzolato
"Somebody Watching" by name undisclosed
"Broken by the Past" by name undisclosed
Positive and Negative Connotation Sentences
- Describe babysitting your cousins...
Positive connotation:
The kids ran energetically around me, giggling with glee.
Negative connotation:
Screaming and crying, I tried to get the kids under control.
- Describe a wet street after the rain...
Positive connotation:
The rain water drizzled down the asphalt road, spiraling into the drain.
Negative connotation:
The rainwater pounded loudly down the slippery road, sloshing messily into the drain
- Describe a hot summer day
Positive connotation:
The sun shone [brightly] over the top of the small town, blanketing everyone in warmth and sweet air.
Negative connotation:
The sun scalded everyone from the sky, drenching them in sweat and encasing them in suffocating humidity.
Quotation Integration
From "The Night Market"
I felt a sense of guilt overwhelming me, as I "[shove food] into my mouth [into] someone I am trying to save" (Lau 28-29).
The speaker feels compassion for the woman because he/she can "buy [her] a meal and not miss it" yet ignores her to "gorge on dumplings and waffles." (Missing citation)
From "Ice Palace"
The architecture of the Ice Palace is quite simple, being made without "opal gelatin that glows like phosphorescent deep-sea fish" (Atwood 8-9).
The Ice Palace is portrayed as "only dreams", meaning the palace is a lie, further accented by being described as "breath [formed] into words. (Missing citation)
Sometimes, things can be too good to be true. Some things can sway between a paradise and a dark hell. Most of the time, it is a trap with beauty only paper thin, like "clouds of breath formed into words" (Atwood 12-13). We should be cautious of things that tempt us.
The Ice Palace may seem magnificent on the outside, but to uncover the truth you must dig deeper since "[b]ackstage it's always carnage" (Atwood 26).
From "Becoming a Writer"
Some may find creative writing to be a daunting task but ideas are "all within you" (Margoshes 3). When finding a new idea, it may feel like an "epiphan[y]/flashing like [a] light bulb above the head" (14-15).
Ideas and inspiration "emerges from this cocoon", meaning that it comes from inside like "epiphanies flashing [like] lightbulbs." (Missing citation)
I felt a sense of guilt overwhelming me, as I "[shove food] into my mouth [into] someone I am trying to save" (Lau 28-29).
The speaker feels compassion for the woman because he/she can "buy [her] a meal and not miss it" yet ignores her to "gorge on dumplings and waffles." (Missing citation)
From "Ice Palace"
The architecture of the Ice Palace is quite simple, being made without "opal gelatin that glows like phosphorescent deep-sea fish" (Atwood 8-9).
The Ice Palace is portrayed as "only dreams", meaning the palace is a lie, further accented by being described as "breath [formed] into words. (Missing citation)
Sometimes, things can be too good to be true. Some things can sway between a paradise and a dark hell. Most of the time, it is a trap with beauty only paper thin, like "clouds of breath formed into words" (Atwood 12-13). We should be cautious of things that tempt us.
The Ice Palace may seem magnificent on the outside, but to uncover the truth you must dig deeper since "[b]ackstage it's always carnage" (Atwood 26).
From "Becoming a Writer"
Some may find creative writing to be a daunting task but ideas are "all within you" (Margoshes 3). When finding a new idea, it may feel like an "epiphan[y]/flashing like [a] light bulb above the head" (14-15).
Ideas and inspiration "emerges from this cocoon", meaning that it comes from inside like "epiphanies flashing [like] lightbulbs." (Missing citation)
1st Synthesis: "Dante's Ikea" and Inferno
Student exemplar - not too bad for a first synthesis!
Poetry Synthesis - Canadian poems
Synthesis writing is probably the most difficult skill you are going to master in English 11 Honours. I was blown away by the mature ideas and deft, sophisticated writing style of the students whose work is attached below.
"Ice Palace" and "Super's Report" Synthesis by Margarita Bajamic
"Ice Palace" and "Super's Report" Synthesis by Margarita Bajamic
"Blackberries" and "The Night Market" Synthesis by Anonymous Student
Most (consistently) high quality reading logs in Term One
Yes I read these logs, in case you were wondering! I've marked out out of 6 for completion and effort.
6= complete with thoughtful answers
5= complete with some thoughtful answers/missing 1 section
4= complete but with rushed, limited answers/ missing 2 sections
3= missing 3 sections
2= missing 4 sections
1= did one thing
Reading Log Pros of Term One: Your outstanding work ethic is greatly appreciated!
#1: Mika Colonia - reading logs are detailed and thoughtfully expressed
#2: Vanessa Da Silva - queen of consistency
#3: Bianca Bevilacqua - queen of organization
More synthesis exemplars...
"Schrodinger's Baby" by Charlie Fish and "The Scream" by H. Briscoe In-class Synthesis
It is never easy to write anything under a time crunch. The following students have successfully written insightful, organized synthesis essays in the allotted 80 minutes.
It is never easy to write anything under a time crunch. The following students have successfully written insightful, organized synthesis essays in the allotted 80 minutes.
Student A exemplar
Student B exemplar